I’ve swept all those words
from the threshold so just knock
and it will open.
I posted an earlier version of this but it bothered me when I reread it later in the day. I’m reading Eleanor Cook’s new book Elizabeth Bishop at Work (Harvard) and her meticulous chapter on diction — Bishop very fond of Herbert — I think increased my uneasiness. I believe this version recalls Herbert, especially in the use of dialogue of man and God.